Uninvited Intruder

A while ago, Agatha and Pancake got into a little spat. However, it seems that their little conflict has had far-reaching consequences. . .

 

 

"Alright Raising Heart. Are you ready to go?"

Raising Heart: "Yes my master. Initializing dimensional transfer."

 

 

Raising Heart: "We have arrived at the destination."

 

 

"Well, I suppose we should get going then!"

 

 

"Place looks pleasant. . . "

 

 

". . .enough?"

 

 

 

 

 

". . . there's stuff of me all over the place."

 

 

"Well, this is probably going to be awkward."

 

 

"What on earth. . .?"

 

 

"Are you all right, little guy?"

Pancake: *shudder*

 

 

Agatha: "Get back here, you thieving little rat!"

 

 

Agatha: "You are going to pay for stealing my tools! I'm going to take your conciousness and transfer it into a beetle! And then I'll put that beetle inside of a box, hook it up to a piece of uranium, and--"

 

 

"Whoa!"

 

 

Agatha: "What the. . . "

 

 

Agatha: "Who are you, and what do you think you're doing here?"

 

 

"Captain Nanoha Takamachi, of the Time-Space Administration Beaureau. I've come to investigate a disturbance."

 

 

Agatha: "You really think you're. . . ? Seriously?"

 

 

Agatha: "Very funny. Now, please hand over that dragon."

 

 

Nanoha: "The dragon?"

 

 

Agatha: "Yes, that dragon!"

 

 

Agatha: "That imp has been stealing my tools and hiding them all over this place!"

 

 

Agatha: "I had to build a wormhole generator to get them back, even! He needs to be punished, or else he just keeps doing it!"

 

 

Nanoha: "What--You caused that wormhole?"

 

 

Agatha: "Yes, that's my handiwork. Tricky to do without tools, but I managed."

 

 

Agatha: "Now, if you'll excuse me. . ."

 

 

Agatha: ". . .I have some work to do."

 

 

Nanoha: "I can't let you do that."

 

 

Nanoha: "I will let you say your piece, and depending on the cirbleepstances I may be lenient. But until I have the full story, I can't let you hurt that dragon."

 

 

Agatha: "HEY POOF! There's a crazy woman in the house who's trying to steal my scientific work and kidnap Pancake!"

 

 

Nanoha: "There's another person here, and you ran a home-made wormhole generator anyway?"

 

 

Agatha: "Yeah. So?"

 

 

Agatha, what is this all--omigod.

Nanoha: "Sorry for intruding. My name is Nanoha Takamachi, of--"

Oh dude, I know who you are! I'm a huge fan!

 

 

Nanoha: "Oh, so that's your poster then. I'm here because Raising Heart and I detected a dimensional disturbance here, which we need to investigate."

A dimensional disturbance here? But how?

 

 

Nanoha: "Well, your, um. . . roommate here just admitted to it. However, I would like to investigate further. I'd hate to handle this wrong."

Ah, so that's what happened to my toaster!

 

 

Agatha: "What? It's not like she was using it. At least, not for anything interesting. It was for science."

Nanoha: "Are you always like this?"

 

 

Yes, she is.

Agatha: "Oh, come on. It was just a boring old toaster."

Nanoha: "I see."

 

 

Nanoha: "May I stay for a while? To investigate and to. . .prevent further incidents?"

Wow, really? I'd be honored! Like I said, I'm a huge fan. And hey, it'll be nice to have a buffer between Agatha and Pancake.

 

 

Pancake: *GLOMP*

 

 

Nanoha: "Ooof. That was undisciplined. I'll forgive you this time though."

 

 

Agatha: "Wait, you're letting this lunatic stay?"

Well, if it gets me my toaster back. . .

 

(Sorry for how long it took to get this one up! I did post a slightly different version on Figure.fm earlier, but when I was at my parents' for the holidays their internet wouldn't access this site. Very strange.)

Hey! All the dialogue changed. And this time Agatha recognizes Nahona but doesn't think she's real just some nut. On ffm she didn't even seem to recognize her. Which one is canon?

Hey! All the dialogue changed. And this time Agatha recognizes Nahona but doesn't think she's real just some nut. On ffm she didn't even seem to recognize her. Which one is canon?

 

Yeah, that's because I just launched into this version without re-reading the Ffm one first. XD In the case of what Agatha thinks of Nanoha, this one's definitely the canon--Agatha thinks Nanoha is completely and utterly crazy. As for other changes, though, I haven't quite decided yet, especially since the gist of the lines is only subtly different in some cases.

 

Very nice story.

Some time ago I would be skeptical about Agatha & toaster wormhole generator but in meantime I've read some of GG comix

Nanoha's so adorable~ I look forward to seeing her and Agatha clash.

And here I thought it was the next part of that FFM one!

 

I actually prefer this version of the story. It's a bit more fun and also it "feels" right somehow. Good job!

 

 

Billy

I didn't see the ffm story, but I liked this one.

 

Science always somehow invovles toasters. They seem to be more useful for things aside from toasting bread.

Such a great story! Good posing, too! I like how Pancake sneaks away and Nanoha almost stops him with Raising Heart, then Agatha just glares at her for letting him go1

Fabulous shots! It is great to see Nanoha in action. The second photo is awesome! I hope balance can come to your household. They sure are so cute all together!

I enjoyed your story. I like the way you took the pictures, different angles and perspectives. Great.

I love the when Nanoha looks behind her and sees the figma, hehehehehehe, and I still love Pancake so much!!!

Love it! ahaha so cute!

Considering all of that merchandise, at least Nanoha knows she will be appreciated in her new home XD

That's a neat poster too! It's crazy how many forms Nanoha and Fate have O_o